On Thu, 2016-02-11 at 08:05 +0100, ddemaio wrote:
Great feedback. How is this? v/r Doug
Much improved, but I'm still noticing a few issues: SPONSORSHIP HIGHLIGHTS First bullet has 'conference' twice: " Promotion through the openSUSE conference website --conference-- events.opensuse.org " Greate Reasons to Sponsor the openSUSE Conference Title has a type s/Great/Greate/ SPONSORSHIP OPPORTUNITIES I still don't like the graphic there - don't see why Platinum sponsorship is represented the same size as Bronze sponsorship. Pg. 2 The openSUSE Community The last sentence in the section is missing end punctuation: " …the boundaries of FOSS are expanded " Partners 2nd to last para has some grammatical issues, and needs at least a little edit: " While the countless hours extended by volunteers to orchestrate the event --to-- provide the atmosphere and framework for the conference, commercial sponsorship provides the necessary financial backing. " Last para - your instead of you, and ending punctuation. " …meet you specific needs " should be " …meet your specific needs. " -- James Mason Technical Architect, Public Cloud openSUSE Member SUSE jmason@suse.com