On Fri, Feb 5, 2016 at 9:27 PM, James Mason wrote:

On Fri, 2016-02-05 at 10:48 -0800, PatrickD Garvey wrote:

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On Fri, Feb 5, 2016 at 3:55 AM, differentreality wrote:

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Hello all,

On Tue, Feb 2, 2016 at 8:28 PM, Douglas DeMaio wrote:

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https://en.opensuse.org/images/0/0f/OpenSUSE_Conference_2016_Pros pectus.pdf (ddemaio, 17:05:42)

We must proofread the prospectus before making it public.

The title contains 2015, not 2016.

Under "SPONSORSHIP HIGHLIGHTS"

First bullet: there should be a linebreak before the URL, so it's all on one line, not broken.

"conference.opensuse.org" instead of "… conference. opensuse.org "

Last bullet: "upon request" instead of "under request"

End note: this doesn't make sense to me at all ("Special will be offer due …"; can the author rephrase please?

"GREAT REASONS TO SPONSOR THE openSUSE CONFERENCE"

1st para: The 2nd line of text ("their time and effort to create of the the outstanding") has a lighter font weight than the rest of the paragraph.

Strangely, it's not selectable as part of that paragraph's text either; something's funny with the layout.

Last para: "information" is broken in half at the line break, but there's no hyphen. It needs to be either hyphenated or not broken.

SPONSORSHIP OPPORTUNITIES

The graphic evokes a rainbow, but for whatever reason, the 10_000€ sponsorship line is the same lenght as the 1_000€ line; why not just form the full rainbow, let Platinum be bigger than Bronze ?

2nd page has a bunch of lines with mixed weight/unselectable, in the "ThE openSUSE COMMUNITY" and "PARTERS" sections.

THE openSUSE COMMUNITY

This is the only section where the title starts the text. For a transition like that, consider adding an ellipsis, like " THE openSUSE COMMUNITY… is a global community …"

"environment" is broken in half at the line break, but there's no hyphen. It needs to be either hyphenated or not broken.

The note " SHOW YOUR SUPPORT FOR openSUSE AND THE openSUSE CONFERENCE! " looks odd, with "openSUSE" at both ends of the 2nd line. Can we reword this?

"Financial support…"

First para: The first sentence contains an obvious falsehood - " Financial support … from sponsors is invaluable and crucial. " In fact, it has a very precise, known value - the amount we're asking a sponsor to contribute.

Let's cut the falsehood and just go with " Financial support for the openSUSE conference from sponsors is crucial for the success of the event. "

Last para: guaranteeing is misspelled as "garantueeing".

PARTNERS

First para: The first line has some grammatical errors. Can we reword this? Maybe something like " Besides the general sponsorships, we are offering a few fun partnership options. Give our community ice cream, coffee, or lunch, and your logo and name will be connected to the service, as well as being featured in the partner section of our promotional materials. "

Fourth para: this is an exact duplicate of the "Financial support" paragraph in green on the left column.

-- James Mason Technical Architect, Public Cloud openSUSE Member SUSE jmason@suse.com

Thank you both for the quick input! :) I have started https://docs.google.com/document/d/1vcwhzJ7EA3BwUvv1PhP3BjG9KFGA0DkAHzHUkHyd... I will make sure to add everything mentioned here (probably tomorrow). Moreover if someone has the original text, it could be copied to google docs and we can make the changes directly on it (copying it from PDF is... problematic) Relevant card in trello (feel free to add yourselves): https://trello.com/c/2cbbkvHO/35-proofread-sponsors-brochure Stella -- To unsubscribe, e-mail: opensuse-project+unsubscribe@opensuse.org To contact the owner, email: opensuse-project+owner@opensuse.org

Hi, Something that has struck me immediately is the sponsorship opportunities not being put in any order, either ascending nor descending. I will see the document better later. BR Georgios On Tue, Feb 9, 2016 at 11:57 AM, ddemaio wrote:

On 02/05/2016 11:25 PM, differentreality wrote:

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On Fri, Feb 5, 2016 at 9:27 PM, James Mason wrote:

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On Fri, 2016-02-05 at 10:48 -0800, PatrickD Garvey wrote:

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On Fri, Feb 5, 2016 at 3:55 AM, differentreality wrote:

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Hello all,

On Tue, Feb 2, 2016 at 8:28 PM, Douglas DeMaio wrote:

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https://en.opensuse.org/images/0/0f/OpenSUSE_Conference_2016_Pros pectus.pdf (ddemaio, 17:05:42)

We must proofread the prospectus before making it public.

The title contains 2015, not 2016.

Under "SPONSORSHIP HIGHLIGHTS"

First bullet: there should be a linebreak before the URL, so it's all on one line, not broken.

"conference.opensuse.org" instead of "… conference. opensuse.org "

Last bullet: "upon request" instead of "under request"

End note: this doesn't make sense to me at all ("Special will be offer due …"; can the author rephrase please?

"GREAT REASONS TO SPONSOR THE openSUSE CONFERENCE"

1st para: The 2nd line of text ("their time and effort to create of the the outstanding") has a lighter font weight than the rest of the paragraph.

Strangely, it's not selectable as part of that paragraph's text either; something's funny with the layout.

Last para: "information" is broken in half at the line break, but there's no hyphen. It needs to be either hyphenated or not broken.

SPONSORSHIP OPPORTUNITIES

The graphic evokes a rainbow, but for whatever reason, the 10_000€ sponsorship line is the same lenght as the 1_000€ line; why not just form the full rainbow, let Platinum be bigger than Bronze ?

2nd page has a bunch of lines with mixed weight/unselectable, in the "ThE openSUSE COMMUNITY" and "PARTERS" sections.

THE openSUSE COMMUNITY

This is the only section where the title starts the text. For a transition like that, consider adding an ellipsis, like " THE openSUSE COMMUNITY… is a global community …"

"environment" is broken in half at the line break, but there's no hyphen. It needs to be either hyphenated or not broken.

The note " SHOW YOUR SUPPORT FOR openSUSE AND THE openSUSE CONFERENCE! " looks odd, with "openSUSE" at both ends of the 2nd line. Can we reword this?

"Financial support…"

First para: The first sentence contains an obvious falsehood - " Financial support … from sponsors is invaluable and crucial. " In fact, it has a very precise, known value - the amount we're asking a sponsor to contribute.

Let's cut the falsehood and just go with " Financial support for the openSUSE conference from sponsors is crucial for the success of the event. "

Last para: guaranteeing is misspelled as "garantueeing".

PARTNERS

First para: The first line has some grammatical errors. Can we reword this? Maybe something like " Besides the general sponsorships, we are offering a few fun partnership options. Give our community ice cream, coffee, or lunch, and your logo and name will be connected to the service, as well as being featured in the partner section of our promotional materials. "

Fourth para: this is an exact duplicate of the "Financial support" paragraph in green on the left column.

-- James Mason Technical Architect, Public Cloud openSUSE Member SUSE jmason@suse.com

Thank you both for the quick input! :)

I have started

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1vcwhzJ7EA3BwUvv1PhP3BjG9KFGA0DkAHzHUkHyd...

I will make sure to add everything mentioned here (probably tomorrow).

Moreover if someone has the original text, it could be copied to google docs and we can make the changes directly on it (copying it from PDF is... problematic)

Relevant card in trello (feel free to add yourselves): https://trello.com/c/2cbbkvHO/35-proofread-sponsors-brochure

Stella

The original file was really jacked up pretty bad. I made the recommended changes. Please take a look and let me know what you think. v/r Doug

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Great feedback. How is this? v/r Doug On 02/10/2016 08:40 PM, Christian Boltz wrote:

Hello,

Am Dienstag, 9. Februar 2016, 11:57:33 CET schrieb ddemaio:

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The original file was really jacked up pretty bad. I made the recommended changes. Please take a look and let me know what you think. "sponsorship highlights" section:

"Special will be offer due to sponsorship level" causes a parser failure in my brain - please re-phrase that sentence ;-)

Also, it's not clear to which sponsorship level the items belong

"As a sponsor, you:"

The second and third lines in the bullet list should be intented. Also, the line lenght should match the "Great Reasons..." section.

"Why become a Sponsor?"

The second lines in the bullet list should be intented.

"Partners"

In the last paragraph, something looks strange in "we look forward". It seems there are some additional letters printed over the 'd' of 'forward'.

That said - in general, the sponsorship brochure looks good :-)

Regards,

Christian Boltz

Hello, Am Donnerstag, 11. Februar 2016, 17:03:20 CET schrieb James Mason:

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Great feedback. How is this? v/r Doug

Much improved, but I'm still noticing a few issues:

James already found most issues in the new version. Some additional details: In the "Sponsorship Highlights" section, James already mentioned that the first bullet point contains "conference" twice. I'd also like to mention that it should be "Conference" with uppercase C. It's still not clear which of the sponsorship highlights are connected to which sponsorship level - is that intentional? After the "As a sponsor, you:" headline, there should be some free space, so that the distance between the headline and the first bullet point is at least the same as between the bullet points. There should also be some free space above the "Sponsorship Opportunities" box. Feel free to reduce the distance between the bullet points in that area to keep the whitespace at the bottom of the page. The second bullet point seems to include a double space: "and interested____in information technology" On the second page, some whitespace above the "Why Become a Sponsor" headline would be nice. Just move the content below that headline down, there's enough space left ;-) Regards, Christian Boltz -- Just my 0.04 € (adjusted for inflation) [Joachim Schrod in opensuse-factory] -- To unsubscribe, e-mail: opensuse-project+unsubscribe@opensuse.org To contact the owner, email: opensuse-project+owner@opensuse.org

Hello, Am Montag, 15. Februar 2016, 11:27:17 CET schrieb ddemaio:

On 02/11/2016 10:11 PM, Christian Boltz wrote:

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Am Donnerstag, 11. Februar 2016, 17:03:20 CET schrieb James Mason:

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It's still not clear which of the sponsorship highlights are connected to which sponsorship level - is that intentional?

Yes, the sponsorship levels are basically upon the sponsor to agree to the terms.

Ah, ok. That explains it ;-)

Ok, I made the suggested changes. Please let me know if there is anything else.

Thanks for the update! It looks good now :-) Regards, Christian Boltz -- Meeting, n.: An assembly of people coming together to decide what person or department not represented in the room must solve a problem. -- To unsubscribe, e-mail: opensuse-project+unsubscribe@opensuse.org To contact the owner, email: opensuse-project+owner@opensuse.org

Hi all, I wanted to give you an update from our Organizing Team Meeting from Feb. 16. If you want to help with any of the Trello cards, we would welcome your help. There are a few cards people can do from any where like an article about hotels and hostels. Just add yourself to a card you would like to do or work on with someone - https://trello.com/b/xhSviOKO The big take away from this week's meeting is getting people to submit proposals - http://bit.ly/1o1Nn7I 1. Submit SUSE Labs Summit proposal on events.opensuse.org under type ‘Submit SUSE Labs Summit’ 2. Contact seigo@kolabsystems.com and info@hcderaad.nl for proposals for Kolab Summit 3. Submit OwnCloud proposal on events.opensuse.org under type ‘OwnCloud’ 4. Submit SaltStack proposal on events.opensuse.org under type ‘SaltStack’ We should release an article tomorrow about the dates and location. v/r Doug Week 2 notes - http://community.opensuse.org/meetings/opensuse-project/2016/opensuse-projec... Week 1 notes - http://community.opensuse.org/meetings/opensuse-project/2016/opensuse-projec...