Mailinglist Archive: opensuse-project (95 mails)

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> Looks great.
> 
> Three little things:
> 
> > ... a project for everybody striving for an open free software
distribution
> ...requires some separation between the adjectives. So, either a comma
> ("open, free") or a conjunction ("open and free").

I prefer the "open and free" suggestion. As another suggestion, I also
prefer the word "everyone" instead of "everybody", as it cuts a syllable
out of a syllable-heavy sentence. 

> 
> > It also allows to directly contribute to the
> 
> Need to specify who; i.e. "It also allows individuals to directly..."
> 

I like the word "individuals" there. :)



> > ... the ideals of free software: the freedoms to use, share, study and
> > modify, and share modified versions.
> >
>
> Do you have a suggestion how to change it? I'm no native speaker
either, so
> I'm not sure, how strange it really sounds.

I think it sounds funny because it doesn't have a direct object. I
propose this minor modification:

... the ideals of free software: the freedoms to use, study, modify, and
share software.



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Other than those things, I think it's an excellent document. Good job,
and congratulations to everyone involved. :)

Cordially,
~~ Andrew Dorney
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