See both inline comments below and general content comments at the end of the email here: On Wed, 2010-04-21 at 17:23 +0100, Andrew Wafaa wrote:

Hi AJ,

On Wed, 2010-04-21 at 17:04 +0200, Andreas Jaeger wrote:

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I wanted to hack together a 4 slide version to introduce the openSUSE Build Service and I'm currently at 16 slides ;-(

I'd like to share the current content with you and would like to have your feedback on this. I'm not targetting exactly 4 slides but like to condense this a bit more. I guess I leave the competion slides in.

The goal of the presentation should be to tease an ISV or an upstream project to ask me: Give me a demo of the Build service and tell me more details.

Any feedback on the slides is more than welcome - and I volunteer to put the final slides up on the wiki as "reference material" for others giving presentations.

Andreas

I think the key here is to try and keep text on the slides to a minimum. Condense bullet points, to keep things short and sweet - if there is too much text people will concentrate more on the text than on what is being said.

I agree with reducing the amount of text. Not just for what Andy says about concentration, but also because environment has an effect on ability to read text. If you're in a large room and sitting way in the back, or if the lighting atmosphere is not conducive to the projection, those all factor in prominently to the ability to grasp what is on the screen and the substance of the presentation.

Easy to understand pictures are also very good.

I can see a drawing of a packager sitting at a computer connected to a cloud and out comes logos of different distros. That would easily speak volumes what you've said in the first initial pages. The only time I truly find "wordy" presentations to be useful is when I reference the slides outside of the presentation. Without a speaker present, and just reading the slides, that's when its good to be wordy.

I'll try and have a massage around and see what I can come up with - I'm no presentation guru though ;-)

All in all the info contained is great, but where is the "long" intro slide deck? I'd love to see that too.

Regards,

Andy

To me, the existence of slides 2 and 3 are redundant. ("What is.." and "Goals of"...) The goals of OBS should be well-defined and obvious within the explanation of what OBS is. I'd keep Slide 4 because it establishes credibility for OBS as sa well-established and effective tool that can be used by many. Do we have success stories of other distros packaging with OBS? Slide 5 - This type of display always annoys me in presentations. Placing dark letters against a dark color background makes it very difficult to read. But if I were to keep this, (with the color changes of course), I would recommend you use this as slide 3, and use the existing slide 3 to build on Slide 2 (as mentioned above) Slide 6 - I think if you're covering your points well initially during Slides 2 and 3, then Slide 6 becomes merely repetitive. Slides 8-10 -- I think you could reduce a lot of text by replacing it with screenshots. The competitor slides should remain as is. I guess it really depends on what you want to do for a presentation. I'm gathering what you're looking for is a quick lightning presentation? If so, then condensing as above is probably good. But for longer presentations, probably much of the existing stuff would remain intact (though lighten up on the amount of text) where you have the opportunity to dive into each point in more detail over an hourlong presentation period. Just my thoughts. If you want help on actual text condensation, let us know. Thanks, Bryen -- To unsubscribe, e-mail: opensuse-marketing+unsubscribe@opensuse.org For additional commands, e-mail: opensuse-marketing+help@opensuse.org

On Monday 26 April 2010 14:34:19 Klaas Freitag wrote:

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Another approach, Robert did some drawing over lunch break and I was texting: http://en.opensuse.org/images/d/da/4slideobs.odp

Made it very short - don't take it too seriously ;-) It is great! With colors it will be a lot like Mac ads =) OBS is cool! -- Regards, Minton. -- To unsubscribe, e-mail: opensuse-marketing+unsubscribe@opensuse.org For additional commands, e-mail: opensuse-marketing+help@opensuse.org